TEACHER COMMENTS

Hello Emily, I'm really sorry about the delay on getting this comment on to your blog. I was really impressed with your work on this. Your research and planning clearly found its way into your production. You have an excellent eye for layout and design. IN particular I enjoyed the way you used the masthead and the borders on your front covers. The contents pages were sound, but the placement of the text around your images was less well done than the covers. Overall, very strong attention to detail. Looking forward to seeing your music video work. on


Hello Emily,
Firstly, can you move your work on music videos into the relevant posts - You can do this just be relabeling.
The task title should go in 05 music video -brief, the statement of intent doesn't seem to be online yet, so that will need posting into 05 - music video statement of intent, and the script/storyboard will need to go into the 05 - music video planning section.
As for the script/storyboard.
You've used a very informal style, which is okay because there are no rules. However, my advice would be take a look at this website:https://www.writersstore.com/how-to-write-a-screenplay-a-guide-to-scriptwriting/
This shows a screenplay format. As you can see, the details of description are really very clear, so another person could take your script and use it.
Also, be aware that you probably need a lot more shots than you have. Really think carefully.
I actually quite liked those drawings.